- Has strong adjectives
- Different sentence beginnings
- Different sentence lengths
- A simile and/or alliteration
- Has an introduction, body and conclusion
- Thoughtful word choices
- Writing simple and compound sentences correctly.
Scene description- Rory
I turn around and in front of my eyes I see the most amazing scene. Water as bright as a torch in your eye. There was a nice refreshing cold drink waiting for you on a very hot day. The sand just makes you want to dig your feet in because it feels so nice. It is such a crisp and stunning day I just want to have a holiday there. It is such a sunny day; perfect for a swim in that water. It is so refreshing. It just makes me want to live there. The sand is so warm. I just want to put it all over me and sleep there. The drink is so delicious and cold that when I'm really hot, I can just tip it over my head. It is such a nice day with. If I just look at a picture of it gives me the beachy feel. A perfect place to relax.